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Morgan Yeah -- I was bored and unemployed, so I figured I'd up the anty a little, heehee. I'm glad you're getting the updates asap. ^^ Thanks for the corrections, and I'm glad you liked the action in the scene (I was a bit worried about it). ^^
Posted at: 2008-06-11 13:02:57
Arielle I wasn't expecting a new chapter so soon, but now that I have it going to my feed reader, I'll get them as they come out! ^.^ Corrections: "the way Catori was peering at em." Catori is peering at Ez, so "peering at him." "Ey went away a year ago." I'm assuming Ez is talking here, but I don't really understand what he's saying. Possible pronoun error? "Just because it had happened to his mother," If it's referring to Tori's mother, then it's a pronoun error. "about the inhumane cries in the distance. " Inhuman maybe? :P "dead creatures skull," -> dead creature's skull Nice action, I'm interested to see what's coming up next for them!
Posted at: 2008-06-10 18:34:45
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